There is a school called LNS,
Unique as unique could be.
It has sailing and kayaking,
Watches as form,
Berets, Parade and navy.
It has rewards, heritage and blue wooly jumpers,
white shirts and black ties.
Our uniform is dandy indeed,
We have skills and we have rhythm.
Full of heroism,
This school can’t get better you see.
We’ve been through terror,
We’ve been through whatever,
Thats why this school stood out to me!
BY : ALI.Q AND FRANKIE.T
This post is very good and I like that it is a poem and that it is your opinion.The content is very effective.Next time you should not space your poem as much. Comment by ARB
June 19, 2015 at 12:42 pm
I think your topic and style is good. My view on your poem on LNS is that you used descriptive words about LNS.
I think you should make the poem a bit longer because it would make it a bit more interesting.
louis
June 19, 2015 at 12:46 pm
This is a fantastic poem.
It was hard to understand at first, however after a few reads I found that this poem was very imaginative and creative.
I really like this poem and the way it rhymes.
I hope to see even more poems like this.
GREAT WORK 🙂
June 19, 2015 at 1:00 pm
This is an amazing poem Ali and Frankie. Although its truthful you could add a bit more “wow” to make the piece more interesting into it the schools reputation. imagine if an ofsted would read this. Our school would be quite dull. My advice is to add more wow words into the comments about the school and add a bit more adjectives describing how it is.
by Adam.S
July 10, 2015 at 12:33 pm
this is good