One of the best thing I ever done in LNS is going to Minecraft club every Monday, Wednesday, Thursday and Friday. My favourite subject is Maths. I’ve got 6A for Maths.
The content is very small, the style is very simple, the spelling needs to be checked and the view needs to be stated clearly. Comment by ARB
June 11, 2015 at 9:37 am
Try to improve your spelling and not talk about your personal life. The content is very small, and the style is very simple.
June 11, 2015 at 9:41 am
your grammar can be improved and also add more content.
June 11, 2015 at 9:46 am
to improve this piece you should avoid talking about personal information such as exam grades as they can be used against you. unfortunately the content is rather minute and the style simple. In contrary to my previous statement I reckon with the right amount of effort you can really become a valuable asset to splash. by ???z??
June 11, 2015 at 9:50 am
This is a very good attempt Sammy (Especially for your standards) but your Content and Style was too small and Next time try to Type at least a paragraph or two!
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June 19, 2015 at 12:47 pm
Well done for being smart for maths Sammy!!!! Now you need to focus on your English.